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packs/redis/config.yml

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   # A Complete Redis Monitoring System
   ## Monitoring Redis
-  Redis is one of the most performant databases available to developers. It operates in-memory and consequently achieves I/O times orders of magnitude faster than traditional database systems. It can be used as a lightweight, distributed queue and also integrates useful features such as a pub/sub notification system.
+  Redis operates in-memory and achieves I/O faster than traditional database systems. It includes several data structures which make it ready to use right out of the box.
 
-  Redis is popular in the gaming, IoT, and mobile industries due to its easy onboarding and blazing-fast performance. It includes several data structures which make it ready to use right out of the box.
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-  New Relic provides a Redis dashboard which allows you to monitor your Redis instances.
+  New Relic provides a Redis quickstart which allows you to monitor your Redis instances out-of-the-box.
 
   ## New Relic - A Perfect Tool to Monitor Redis
   Redis is known for its speed, so ensuring that it stays operating at peak performance is paramount. Slowdowns can lead to a compromised user experience or even a complete application failure.
 
-  Monitoring Redis is a passive process, but the New Relic tool provides actionable insights into the health of a Redis system. In short, New Relic is more than just a monitor. It supports custom charts and custom queries using data from New Relic Insights, and pre-built dashboards are available for those who don’t need custom configurations. All critical performance and health metrics are monitored.
+  New Relic's Redis monitor provides actionable insights into the health of a Redis system. It supports custom charts, custom queries, and pre-built dashboards are available for those who don’t need custom configurations. All critical performance and health metrics are monitored.
 
-  ## New Relic Redis Kit Features
+  ## New Relic Redis Quickstart Features
+  Our Redis quickstart include out-of-the-box dashboards and alerts, including data such as:
   - Overview Snapshot (# masters, # slaves) + charts with commands/sec and commands/sec by node
   - Charts showing connected clients, connected clients by node, changes since last save by node, expired keys/second by node, memory used by node, and blocked clients.
   - Charts showing keyspace hit ratio by node, evicted keys/second by node, input bytes/second by node, network I/O per second, and output bytes / second by node.